unknown Viper

GREEN EYES
a poem to ponder...
violence begets violence...a never-ending process
can we bring about change without violence? ...i wish

i like your poems...


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ychinesepoem

VALLEY OF TEARS
In silence,to feel the muse .I like ""it is a lone journey, where centuries throw the dust on your hallowed gifts""most.

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Genevieve

O GOD ARE YOU LISTENING?
God is everywhere, always awake, never sleeps to watch over us. He knows our fears and cries when His people get astray. I know HE IS LISTENING! Wonderful write!

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rizalbob

CONTRAST
rizalbob
I'm thick-headed. Can't place what you are trying to convey. Why do poets talk in vieled speeches and make readers guess what they are trying to say?

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Is it veiled or disturbing you? Some thing is left unsaid. It shakes you to think. One world or a sentence keeps on haunting. I am not talking about myself bot of good poetry. Whole humanity is passing through a convulsive phase. We have to find the truth ruthelessly. Poem reflects the agony of uncertainty. What is the compulsion to say something? I think I am able to tell my view point.



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ychinesepoem

I SEE MY OWN DEMISE
What fine poems! I'd like to read them. Share your beautiful words and beautiful stories with us, then dread has no time to bother you.

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mintchocol8chick

DEAD FAITH
Your use of metaphor is other-worldly. The comparisons you draw are very imaginative (for example, ""the old silence becomes teeth of a dead faith"") and powerful. I enjoy your poems.
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mintchocol8chick

SATURN WILL SHORTLY RISE
This is kind of bizarre and very wonderful.
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hedges776

SUICIDES
One could speculate that ""suicide"" is merely ""accelerating"" the arrival of the 'inevitable'. It is a certain 'shortcut' for those who are tired of waiting for their 'transistion of Energy Form' ... ... and the act is often beneficial to many (or at least some of the surviving) living Beings. By way of example only, I pose this question: ""Would it have been 'disturbing', or 'bad', if Adolf Hitler had committed suicide instead of invading Poland those many ears ago?"" Satish, YOU are an interesting Human; an interesting writer; I enjoy reading the whispering of your interesting Brain. I interpret your communicative writing in this Poem as conveying there can be valid reasons for Beings to employ that available 'shortcut'(suicide). Please correct me if my above assessemt is incorrect.

Reply to hedges776 by Satish Verma

Suicide is a dialogue with death, a confession of guilt, the atonement for the crimes of society. I know about my small city in India. The uneven growth has spurted the suicides. The lake is real, the deaths are real. Hitler was a paranoid. It could have been much better, had he gone earlier. I endorse yours views. Thank You edit

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Angeldeath

SUICIDES
This is a bit disturbing, but in a good way. Suicide is not the way to solve anything. It only causes more problems for everyone else. Another good write. Angeldeath Adam
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Buchi

SEARCH
I read this poem of yours several times trying to bring before me the event you portray there. pain is event and existence of gangerene which could mean amputation reminds me of my stories and the tears people have had to live with. great poem.
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Poetica

TRACKS
I was reminded of words from the Bible when I read this piece....The imagination of man is evil continually, they had become wicked and destructive which is why God destroyed them, but he preserved a remnant... very thought provoking.

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nitepoet

BELL?S PALSY
I have been in the clutches of Bell's Plasy recently. Luckily it is the tail end of this horrible nightmare as my facial feautres are finally close to being back to normal. The drooping has cleared, the eye can now close on it's own and no more eye drops are needed. and today the doctor said the twitching will soon disappear..

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Roger Cornish

A TEAR DROP
Thank you so much for a Wonderful Poem.
Your truly gifted!
Roger.

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Shava, Angeldeath, Shiralley arzish

NO ANSWER
Shava

Losing someone can be hard. Especailly when you never find out why the left in the first place. Makes me sad though because I'm going through an emotional time right now and everyones writing poems about losing people but I liked it. ~!*!~sHaVz~!*!~

Angeldeath
This is a very intresting poem, I like how you played out the words, I too wonder... Where did the moon go. Great write Angeldeath Adam

shiralley arzish
you are good at words .loved the poem. regards sherry
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Josh Silvers

DEATH AND DUST
nice verbage and good poem
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Liddie22

REVOCATION
Beautifully said. We all vow to challenge tradition in our youth only to retun to it for comfort as we test our strength over time and then forget the great call of endless possibilities audible mostly to youthful ears. Great write. Liddie

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Zelgin Yorae

WHAT ENDING?
Not bad, I feel that the ending is never near, that the separate stories end, yet stories continue when others end. This is the reality of living creatures.

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Patrick McFarland

SUICIDES
Sad and moving. I have heard it said that to be a great poet, one must know great pain. I feel sad because you are truly a great poet.
Peace.

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Roger Cornish

HOLDING MY TOES
When I read poetry like this it illustrates how far I have, Poetically, to travel.
So, I'll make up some sandwiches and get on my way.... and if I get even close to your writing, then I will be thrilled!
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Patrick McFarland

DESERTED WASTELAND
Wonderful and moving and wise and tranquil all at once. What a great great poem.
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Sunil Uniyal

ASHES OF HATE
A beautiful poem, Sir, thought provoking.

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Melvin Banggollay

CATCH THE SUNSET
I love this piece so much as it poetically display the magic of your pen and wit of your mind.

thanks and best wishes,

melvin
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Melvin Banggollay

IN THE INTERMITTENT LOVE
very nice poem. I like its deepness and content.

best wishes,

melvin

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expression

Messeage from expression

I have been reading your work. It is very deep and profound so much so that I am unable to comment on it. Please excuse me for it. Some of your verses are beyond my understanding too.

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rajagopal haran

EMPTINESS WAS SCREAMING
Loving can cost a lot but not loving always costs more, and those who fear to love often find that want of love is an emptiness that robs the joy from life.-great poem sir; enjoyed it


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Mystery

BLEEDING HEART
I really like ""Do not wake me up I am sleepwalking in the courtyard of the muse"". It is easier to spend time in the land of fantasy and inspiration than to walk through the anguish of the world. Nicely done!

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Subbaraman N V

FACE OF TRUTH
Seeing the face of truth is always a great exercise! Happy thet you could see the face in the course of a night! Congarats! A good poem!

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Subbaraman N V

FAILING GOD
'Seeking my own truth, I abandon the path and fall upon lies'! And there lies the problem and attendent difficulties!

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Subbaraman N V

FAITHLESS AUTUMN
Life of an ordinary mortal is well portrayed! Good poem, nice thoughts, great presentation!
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Subbaraman N V

FALL OF A TENDER DOCTRINE
Why always a tinge of sorrow? God guides, we take the things in their stride and perform our duty without much of unusual expectation! Life is bound to be joyous and peaceful!
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Afua

JUDGEMENT
one day rains will wash away stains on the boulders when the future enters the past i will be ready for judgement welldone Satish

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Genevieve

MIDNIGHT SIN
So, another write to ponder upon. Beautifully written!

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marvin brato

ERECTED IN MY PAIN
Poetic passion describing how much pain we suffer if we succumb to miseries in life, but if we can sustain courage and hope then we can survive to live a happy life. Good thought, highest marks.

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Pramod Khilery

RETURN TO MYSELF
The dilemma of life as seen from the most vantage point articulated in such a heart wrenching as well as heart warming way courtsy the poetic sounds of rhythmic words.
warm regards
pramod


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Patrick McFarland

RETURN TO MYSELF
ved your poem. Great depth and understanding of the human condition crafted with perfect language. I give it a 10.
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Mystery, Buchi

TIDE
Buchi
this is frightening.

Mstery
The world as we know it is changing. Climate and people are becoming less temperate. Nicely done!

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Goldy Locks

TRAMPLING
scaring or scarring? ..it's time to put a spring back in the depleted step; put some air back in the trampled chute. Or is it more beautiful this way...

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Goldy Locks

LIKE A MOONBEAM
`I could hobble along with a younger poem'... is destination the purpose, after all? they tell/feed you the living is in the journey... but how can one have a journey w/out an aim. Does it become a crusade? keep on, sjg

`Our shadows entwined
with our steps.'

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Goldy Locks

LEGITIMACY
'beauty of crucial controversy [...] Greatness was the idea of mediocres. / Every thought had the dignity / of its own! '

Loves it. ~~sjg

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meonomous

BY YOURSELF
I am drawn by the image of the' shadows pulling us apart'. It is powerful and feels all at once sad but also a revelation showing us a solution.

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Meonomous

UNBLINKING
It seems that some things draw us in more than others, it is different for each of us. And these things bind us and make us different, but we are all drawn to something in so many similar ways.

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Goldy Locks

A KISS MELTS
a riftquake certain
to incinerate me up
despite my wedged dissent.

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Goldy Locks

ALONE IN THE HEAT
Seems inevitably futile (not fruitless) . Does life have a point? it's one steady realization after the other. Yet there's nothing steady about it.

best care, sjg xx

'Moon cries at midnight
looking beneath the soft clouds,
to follow eternity.' ... . . . . . . .... loves it.

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Goldy Locks

ARROGANT CURVES
you're more drawn/fascinated by the imperfections, rather than the ideal proportions.

are you? the complexities.

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Goldy Locks

EPILEPTIC TRUTH
momentum, for the sake of momentum.

i always sass keep your sympathies, for it's a swift down-slide to pitying.

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Goldy Locks

PAUSE
behind the tiny engraved names:
we grow towards an undoing,
an undone.

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Pamela Chesnutt, Ardelean

TALL FAITH
awesome poem.... Pamela...ordained minister

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Pamela Chesnutt, Ardelean

WAKES THE BLOOD
I like this poem too. God bless...Pamela...ordained minster
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poewhit

NAMESAKE
"" they have started molesting the mirror"", that is a great line.

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Angeldeath

WINDOW
How do you come up with such deep poems? I am inspired by your work, but i cant just get as deep as you. Great and powerful write. Angeldeath Adam

Reply to Angeldeath by kantasatish@gmail.com

You dont need to dig up deep.Watch yourself and around you to feel and share the happenings with empathy without seeking anything in return.Maintain the purity of truth, you will get the bliss of pen. And thanks for keen observation.

meonomous

I read your words here like the texture on a wall, it is full of fine detail which if not looked at closely you will miss, so you run your fingers over it and find even more. Excellent.

hedges776

YOU have obviously been observing HUMANS for a long time ... but, I ask, is it safe to let them see themselves in the mirror you so skillfully move gently before the masses ...? Will they recognize themselves? Did you by chance change the title from ""Mirror"" to ""Window""? ...

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lillyjane

DAMP THIGHS
Somewhere a bell rings keeps on ringing clear and faithful untouched by echo, chained to a soundless sea. I love thease words , the poem is beautiful and sad , brilliant to. xxx

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lillyjane, rizalbob

MY FAMILY
lillyjane

Thats so beautiful you are indeed a very talented poet. xxx

rizalbob

I like the line ""in nightness of shooting stars"". Beautifully written. Well done.

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goldy_99

INCOMPLETE MAKING
In your poems have got so much philosophy. I like them.

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mintchocol8chick, poet3296e, goldy_99

INCOMPLETE MAKING
mintchocol8chick
""When were you saint, when did you sin ?"" This is really good. Simple language with much deeper meaning.

Flag poet3296e
I like the paragraph that starts with when did you lose when did you win, very profound words also i agree with what goldy said.


Flag goldy_99
In your poems have got so much philosophy. I like them.

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Goldy Locks

BLISS OF ANOTHER SELF
your stuff kindles the core.


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Goldy Locks

TREE OF LIGHT DANCES
i adore conclusion & it never changes.

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Goldy Locks

BODY RECOMES THE PATH
soul mates only exist in children - glad you captured, expressed that.

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Goldy Locks

CLAUSTROPHOBIA
The flameless fire collapses
lapping up the anger.

ending took me by complete surprise... and that's what it's about. best care, sjg

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Goldy Locks

CLAUSTROPHOBIA
ps: Is irrational pain - true pain?

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Tarapada Mohapatra

STRANGE RELATIONSHIP
Great reading...quite intriguing
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goldy_99

NO KNOCKS WILL COME
It is good! I like it.

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rizalbob

THE GUESTS HAVE ARRIVED
Beautifully written. Well done.


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rizalbob

ON DUST I SIT FRIGHTENED
Yes indeed, where are we heading - with all the human sufferings, senseless killings and wars?


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Goldy Locks

PATH OF DESTINY
Stellar: words, imagery. non-truth/false beacon ~ flaunt its devious exposure.

best care, sjg

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izzipoetry, sylvie

DEATH IS NOT A CEREMONY

izzipoetry

Deep and very powerful.""Slowly, dark breast of night will feed the moon' tell me more about thess lines.

sylvie

The inner workings of the mind are a mystery in a way. We are forever searching for the meanings of life, for the why of things, for the knowledge that will set us free. This is thought provoking, and has a lot of depth.

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sylvie

CANNOT FIND THE DOOR
Thought provoking ... again your inagery is so creative. Life can bem a hard judge ... great write.

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sylvie

O GOD ARE YOU LISTENING?
I can really feel the strong emotions within these lines. Great rhythm and imagery brings this to life.

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Louie Limosani

VOYAGE
Good work here, like the images in this poem.

Cheers
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Amita Singh

MISSING PORTRAIT
Wow, very capturing lines to describe the wrong the not so good things of life

My fingers are burnt, my poem bleeds
give me some water, some real cool.
Lake is on fire, god is on run.
Clouds are empty and sun is an abstract.
Frame is broken, portrait missing.
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Earthborn

Message from Earthborn

going through your work. Amazing. I really need to concentrate on the totality. Amazing!

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Goldy Locks

WAYWARD SON
what description. what power. Nothing wayward about your poems. They are direct, wise, and billowing with awesome substance.
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Goldy Locks

FEAR
you proceed logically and scientifically. with your thoughts, yes? But there's always a level of intuitiveness. Where your insight rests.

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Goldy Locks

EUTHANASIA
too much Nip/tuck?

The debt of ashes
was climbing up.
Clouds outside,
clouds inside. .. .. ... ....nice.

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Goldy Locks

WAKING UP
Malibu is up in flames. Denver is getting snow. Crazy/mixed-up world. Insomnia feeds that [notion/delusion] with its removal from reality.

Heart will toss the words in silence
and I will lit the blue flame in stillness. .. ... . .. . . ... . enjoyed, sjg
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Goldy Locks

LISTEN ………………………
start with a bang! finish with a bang! well conceived. ~~sjg
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Goldy Locks

THE KISS ……………….
Death is so sexy with its provoking green eyes!

Stellar lines, composed with care, temperance. ~

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Nelson Nieves

NATIVE TOUCH
Such command of the language, wonderful, write on

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Goldy Locks

THE TERRAIN
what flair you write with!

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Goldy Locks

AWAKENING
It is no secret: I love your writing.

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Goldy Locks

TRACKS
Riveting and wise.

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Earthborn

CHARITY
brilliant.dialogue with death.verse two very interesting.
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meonomous , Earthborn

CHARITY
meonomous

It cuts to the very heart and marrow of this issue, and places sit in a context

Earthborn

brilliant.dialogue with death.verse two very interesting.

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Buchi

CHARITY
This terrible life ejets you', and the rest of this poem brings to mind disturbing questions.
What really has life as we live it offered but trouble and i agree with; Dying is the appropriate thing; a festival of freedom for veils.

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Earthborn

DEMISE
be /beside you/ to watch the demise/.Such power compressed in these few words.The imagery is very carefully designed to ellicit from us the feelings of the poet. good write.

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POETICA

SELF ? PORTRAIT
A descriptive view of a contemplating mind in discord with itself and the effects of life. Great write!

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Earthborn

DEMISE
poewhit

Stress can cause much, and may be a motivator or stimulus of the final outcome.

Earthborn

be /beside you/ to watch the demise/.Such power compressed in these few words.The imagery is very carefully designed to ellicit from us the feelings of the poet. good write.

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Amita Singh

TO BE NOTHING
Very well written poem Satish, its a beautiful depiction of what a lot of us go through and the emotions which are very rarely shared.

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Goldy Locks

BROODING SILENTLY
a reflection. well-penned! Colors, imagery, insight... and that's what it's about.
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Goldy Locks

BLACK WALLS
Amazzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzing~! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! To the astronomical power
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Goldy Locks

ANOTHER JOURNEY
wanted a couple more stanzas. loose ends, here. ~~sjg

Time avenges, burns the grass,
the lips, the retina,
the black walls and white numbers. .......| Great.

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Goldy Locks

………….. Afraid of whom?
Eternal question.
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Goldy Locks

ECLAMPSIA
Last stanza did it for me. Nah, the whole thing did.

best care,
sjg
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Meriki Parkinson\fraser

…… OF HUMANITY
Very strong & thought provoking Satish.

I love the undertone of, 'spiritual warrior'.

Thanks for sharing,
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esroddo

SELF ? PORTRAIT
Wow that was super powerful and intriguing write You are amazing writer. I really enjoyed this piece LISA
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Goldy Locks

WOODS OF CRAFT
realization can be a bitter fruit as well.
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Goldy Locks

I SEE MY OWN DEMISE
not an explanation of human sorrow, but rather a vigorously crafted embodiment of its existence. Well done,
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Diannia Maddox

TO BE NOTHING
Very deep. So touching. Thank you

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Goldy Locks

Satish's poems are loaded. They astound. Wrap your mind around his lines for this guy has lived intently, intensely and has much to share, teach.

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Earthborn

Message from Earthborn
your usual flowing style. the transient nature of life, regrets about ageing, all very poignantly out by imagery and very simple diction.

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expression

Message from expression
There is a very thin invisible line between sanity and insanity and those obsessed by self love and ego often trip over the dividing line and fall into insanity zone. Then there is no difference between the two, rest of the life they struggle to convince that their insanity is sanity but in vain!!!

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Genevieve

NO AND YES
When caught between truth and lies, but the former would hurt and the latter would make your world ---would you choose the latter at the expense of the former? A challenge to one's sensibility though. Nicely done!

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Goldy Locks

ETERNAL CUDDLE
Age is abating, abattoir is empty.
[...]
I am afraid the flames will engulf,
the genius of pathways. ....| well said, keep on.
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Goldy Locks

…… Distant Shores
you're a stimulating writer.

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Goldy Locks

DIMENSIONS
found a new steady reader in me.
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Goldy Locks

VALLEY OF TEARS
daring punctuation. i love it. your closing lines could be a little stronger, unless you're going for a reference/indication to the title. `where centuries throw the dust on your hallowed gifts.' excellent placement...
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Yoonoos Peerbocus

AMBULATING PAIN
smooth flow of ideas..thanks
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Goldy Locks

COUNTDOWN
better, actually. intriguing & perplexing. keep on, sjg
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Goldy Locks

SHOCK THE GARDEN
`Dark and eternal, in all its purity
punishment becomes an award for life.' .... blind truths, seldom seen, must unveil.
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Anu Veluri

FAULT LINE
Such awesome imagery..
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Kee Thampi

OF GODS AND VIRGINS
A pen of golden verse
Melting to start a romance
in the house of petals,
of fragrant pheromones
deluging the phoenix.
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Anu Veluri

OF GODS AND VIRGINS
Brilliant Satish! ! .. :)
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Violet Llewellyn

SLAUGHTERED MOON
The imagery in this poem is beautiful.
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Marilyn Lott

BELL’S PALSY
So many sad illness in the world and this is certainly one of them.
So well put. God bless you!
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Ariel Escalona

NO ANSWER
great...what question then will i ask...when even the sun cant tell where is the moon....
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Yoonoos Peerbocus

…… SMALL GODS
smooth cadence in your poems

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Kee Thampi

LONE JOURNEY
The real poems makes a transfix of love of soul..
here this poet really made it with a myriad power of writes
An owl on a branch
looks straight, flaps
flies away.

this is not a sexton and not his bells
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Rassool Jibraeel Snyman, South Africa

FOR NOTHING
This poem is a soft deep poem that feels like a cloak of gossamer material - light strong and deep. It's interwoven cadence is a lyric in itself.

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Raveendran .

RAINS ARE COMING
Beautiful presentation of the chthonian awe of the inferno.
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Gautam Nadkarni, Mumbai

THE EXIT
Satish, your flair with words and images is truly phenomenal.

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