UNBELIEVING

Wonderful write Satish .. enjoyed your creativity today.. with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii on vacation ...luv.- Linda-Marie Bariana
Very good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It actually created the atmosphere in front on me!!!!!!!!! Vrushani!!! vrushani thaker

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DROUGHT IN RIVERBED

It appears Nostradamus is with us still .---------------------------- -GREENWOLFE 1962

beautiful....nice to read...- Raju Baruah

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FAIRY TALE

Ahhh, Satish, you are back to the ole' jabberwocky i see...blending obscure parlance with uninterpretable lexicon...Whatever turns you on, my man ! *____________FjR__________*Frank James Ryan,Jr.

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DYING SCREAMS

Fantastic write!~- Tirzah Conway


A very passionatable write,,, ..- (Destroyer ((Poet

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RANDOM SIN

I am enjoying reading the diverse poetry presented here today. I wish you a weekend of good health, love, and inspiration. The best to you always in your endeavors Satish. Love,- Carol Brown

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GOODBYE

There are humble and simple people who feel that they have been sent here as mortal hearts,minds & souls to engage a mission, be it as a parent,spouse or Child of God,and complete it with grace and humble...asking nothing more than to complete hi/her mission & return to whereever they came from, and leaving any angst and rue far behind....Thisnis what i took from your piece...Hope i was somewhat accurate.....- Frank James Ryan,Jr.

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UNBELIEF

Satish in the solitary hours when time ticks and we question our past, which made us the person we are, that is where I find my doe eyed "deer" and the fear of the symbolic "speeding car". As always an excellent poet provokes revealing thoughts. Thank you for this write :)- Marcia Schechinger, USA


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AIR WAS NAKED

Interesting thoughts that you have penned in this one..Keep the creative pen flowing..- Sara Kendrick

 creative and interesting,,, enjoyed...- (Destroyer (Poet)

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ANNIVERSARY

Very rich in images and feelings.- Elizabeth Olesen, Denmark

Satish with powerful images the reader looks at life and death and seals it with a "nighingale". The wonderful abstraction in your verses displays the beautiful talent you possess.- Marcia Schechinger, USA

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COLLECTIVE GUILT

What a sweet play on words.I like the poem.thanks satish for sharing this with us.- Joseph Osita, Nigeria


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AGAINST DEPORTATION

It is a pleasure to be reading your poetry this morning Satish. Wishing you a wonderful day filled with an overload of inspiration. Hoping you will challenge yourself to use all the inspiration which you may receive today. Love,- Carol Brown

I like the essence of the words in this poem. This is such a complex subject to address. The images are intriguing, and they address the quality of life for each person. Great job! - Joseph Spence, Sr

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BOUND BY CEILING

cool write... very interesting...- Michael J. Falotico

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HAPPENINGS

Ur coins excites me.U are a great poet.I love this poem. thanks for sharing- Joseph Osita, Nigeria


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I Cannot Weep

this is very good and metephoric; I really liked this piece a lot for its depth and emotion. Thanks for sharing this with everyone here at AP.- Secret-Sorrow 


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DEWDROP

enjoyed...keep sharing!- Doris Culverhouse


I especially like the first stanza..Keep the creative pen flowing..- Sara Kendrick

very creative write Satish...with original metaphors...I enjoy it...thanks for the share..I kind of forget sometimes but if you like me to read some of your poems...pls shoot me a message,,,thank you ^_^ v- Juan Paolo Galua

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STRANGERS IN SLEEP

When I read this poem, my thoughts go to some places in Asia--in your country or Pakistan being rocked by wars..." God is ailing in multiple failures" for me cries out the hopelessness of the situation although there are local people who are willing to take the first step for peace and reconciliation.However, the bloodbath continues. Thanks for this piece.- Elizabeth Olesen- Denmark


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MAKE - BELIEVE

Hi Satish, I have read through twice, and with great respect, it is a little too deep for me, but I would love to understand the meaning...the words arouse my curiosity. David Maclellan

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EMPTYING

Interesting thoughts that you have penned in this one..I especially like the first stanza last line ...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara- Sara Kendrick

I like the essence of this poem. It's uplifting and is full of images. The mysticism is very touching. Great job!- Joseph Spence, Sr

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LITTLE TRUTHS

what a gory story.. nice use of imagery. I hope the world would one day be a better place to live in for all. Keep your pen dancing to the drumbeat of your passion. You are such a wonderful poet. With love, - Adeleke Adeite

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IMAGES

Lovely write, enjoyed the read... - Destroyer Poet

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FAILED IMMORTALITY

The combined effect of an awesome set of words with imagery which goes beyond the obvious gives a stunning piece of work - - thank you for the pleasure of this read.- Fay Slimm

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ENORMOUS GUILT

I enjoyed your expressions on enormous guilt- Dr. Ram Mehta

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A FAMILY DUST

Adeptly crafted verse which bewails the state of the powerless - -- deeply meaningful....- Fay Slimm

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COLLECTIVE GUILT

Excellent write... deep and compelling.- robyn selters

he solemn depth in the metaphors used carries the weight of the final line - - a strong and meaningful verse.- Fay Slimm

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FEVER RISING

The results of poverty are shown here not only with sparsity of word but with well chosen graphic imagery. Excellent piece.- Fay Slimm

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AGE OF THE STRAW

Satish I am always intrigued by your verses. The true nature plus the abstract mix, which together create an intellectual poem of life and the substance of another dimension. Alway enjoy reading your work. :)- Marcia Schechinger


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MOURNING THE DELUGE

a very noble thought- vrushani thaker

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AVALANCHE

WOW Absolutely great poem Beautiful It kept me on the edge of my seat till the end I will definitely recommend it to all my school friends.- Jennifer Linsay Paul, America


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UNWAKING

I like this a lot.- Elisabeth Barstowe

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LEAVES

Bravo- A magnificent short screenplay here.- Mitch White

Your poetry was a pleasure to read today Satish. May your weekend be full of love,good health and loads of inspiration. Love, - Carol Brown

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GEOMETRY

Geometry, the mathematics of flat planes, and of infinite curves, here you have taken it to a new level—the dimension of the wheel chair, and the mind that walks beside it!- chapman arthur, jr

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SWARMING

Air it that by which we breath and live, it is also that by which flies a swarm of killer bees.- chapman arthur, jr

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VIBRATIONS

To be a question mark in the midst of a dilemma—there are poems, profound, the rattling of the bones of the soul: so many “vibrations”.- chapman arthur, jr

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INWARD ODYSSEY

Lovely but sad, Satish. I just want to you how beautiful your books are. They are so well done. Thank you for sharing them.- Ida Werrett

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AGE OF THE STRAW

This is a very well written poem. I don’t have any critique for it.- Andrew Leamon 


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CUDDLING

Despite the intensity of the opening stanzas, filled with images of horror, the presence of a time bomb and an itchy finger on the trigger, and of restlessness, there is a profound sense of relief in the closing stanza—”sunrises gently on the window”! —soft beauty that comes like sudden thunder!- oxygon

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SUN’S INHERITANCE

The beauty of the sun inherits the ugliness of the world below; what a powerful statement! Rather than the order, the harmony of the heavens, the motion of the moon is as if it is “falling on so many stars”! wow! Rifles, and bombs, a bleak panorama—it weighs heavily upon the spirit that desires to be free. This is a remarkable poem, Satish.- oxygon

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A COLLOSAL MISTAKE

In the flawed, human condition, hurtful words, once planted like a seed, will continue to grow in the heart of the wounded, and death will not end the pain; death never heals, that healing is the province of love, and such love can be seen in the birth of an angel, a rose of evening! I love the way the poet has contrasted such joy in birth, against the first denial that builds like a lie upon a lie. To say “Let me, not/bury them, encroaching/upon the meaning—/for a rusted/consequence, a truth/ was left on the road, seems to imply a fervent commitment to keep the words out in the open, like truth abandoned on the roadside, a glaring sight that cannot be hidden. These are my humble impressions, Satish, and if I err, it is to my lack of understanding, rather than my lack of devotion to reading and enjoying the poem. Let me also take a moment to express my appreciation of your—gift— “Footprints in the Dark”. The binding and jacket is as beautiful as the poems are impressive!

Peace! My good friend. —oxygon

A minor correction is in order—The binding and Jacket “are” as beautiful . . . In this instance, I erred indeed. - oxygon

A good attempt of composing a poem to show how some one’s conscience gets rusted .Poets are individuals. I respect their attitude. Subrata Ray .Uluberia .West Bengal .India .- 

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HOURGLASS

We poets extol the beauty and mystery of the moon in it’s silvery glow, but here the poet sees the paradox of hostility in beauty! It’s a state of mind—the moon not exuding beauty but pain. In the second stanza is hyperbole, and paradox as well, contrasting of the black bird, and the whiteness of the snow man—darkness against light, and finally a snow man on a lake, melting, as if sands in an hourglass! Finally, “Dance the tears/not the tango.”—not a tango of happiness, but a dance of sorrow.- oxygon

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SPLITTING

A beautiful lyric, Satish, with memorable lines—”when the leafless tree was waiting?” I like the composite imagery, the leafless tree, and nakedness, a sense of vulnerability. Regards—oxygon

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*PLASMA SCREEN

The devastation of war invokes many dark images, and a war lost is an incalculable, a compounded suffering. —”a wound becomes a tailsman, you start collecting/the awards from severed hands.” What an antithesis to doubtful honor! A telling argument for the futility of bloodletting! This is a powerful penning, Satish, my friend.- oxygon 


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POETRY

Poetry is many a splendid thing—a collusion between darkness and light, a fusion that leads to a greater light!- oxygon

The great American poet, Wallace Stevens, emphasized the power of the imagination in poetry, and here the imagination is let loose in a series if images and metaphors, that bear out Stevens’ compelling idea. I like the sudden, abrupt interjection of “ice cream cone” and “God bless the Queen.” It makes me think of Stevens’ poem, “The Emperor of Ice Cream”.- oxygon

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SMALL TALK

What a stark contrast—”small talk”, set against a backdrop of such startling verse: “The flesh will extract its own blood.” ! You have taken the poetic device of hyperbole to another level, Satish, in a dream-scape that is like a riddle in search of it own solution!- oxygon

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FAIRY TALE

A splendid fairy tale, Satish! I particularly love the opening stanza, the notion of the moon unwed, as if not spoken for by some admiring heart, as it casts its reflection upon the blue lake, and so endued with silence as if making love to it. Thanks for the poem that delights the “upper” ear, and makes waves upon the still waters of the mind!- oxygon 


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BODY GAME

I especially like the recurrent imagery and themes of the moon, and the poets communion with it in his poems. You walk in harmony with the moon upon the rough terrain of a poem! What a remarkable line! Your poetry deals so effectively with the themes of belief, desire, and the conflicts that belie the pathway of their attainment, but over and over, your quest persists in the face of violence and darkness, and triumphs, even in the weariness of the unending struggle, “like a tired cow coming/back home in evening.” This image is stunning in the depth of its illustration in the likes of the humble cow! Thanks for a splendid poetic penning –oxygon

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A CLEAN MURDER

Interesting and poignant write, Satish.- Ida Werrett

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WREATHS ON DOOR

Very powerful poem, Satish and very sad. “Man’s inhumanity to man makes countless thousands mourn!-Burns- Ida Werrett 


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THIN VEIL

На мой взгляд, это интересный вопрос, буду принимать участие в обсуждении….

my shadow in intermission
envelops the virtue
peak of sorrow, silence of space,
give your hand, within clarity
of reason, inner globe
of light, your kiss melts…..- Kylie BattName

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PUZZLES

По моему мнению Вы ошибаетесь. Давайте обсудим….

международных требованиями ….- Kylie Batt

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PIRACY

I’m afraid I don’t understand this, Satish. I wish I did.- Ida Werrett

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CONSUMPTION

может сначала посмотрим…

The peace has a random price;
buried by sea of volition in knee deep puddles of
saline mud, being in being, after the crash,
to keep dissent alive….. - Kylie Batt

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WARFRONT

A very powerful write, Satish. You have crafted a poem that is the very essence of the madness and folly of war, through sight, sound, symbol and vision that stands upon the foundation of the past, manifests itself in the present, and portends the darkness yet to come! Let me take a moment to thank you for the last two volumes of poetry. I find them to be an adventure of imagination, told with the incisive voice of a poet who dares to dwell on the brink of darkness, but carrying the torchlight of hope for the species, held under its own siege in the lust for meaningless excess of power! Best wishes,- oxygon 

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DEATH’S WINGS

Powerful poem, Satish. Much to think about.- Ida Werrett

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JUST CRIED

A powerful write, Satish! No matter how dark the shadows into which your poetry enters, the words bring light with a passion that defies description. One can feel the raw edge of emotion dripping with blood, and the heat of holy fire! This is truly one of your finest, and I am privileged to have read it. oxygon

the greatness of you joys us all- Nitish shubhankar

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GENERATION

i dont want to say anything here………..except i share the pain…..and i do feel deeply hurt by some peoples deeds……thanks for sharing this poem Mr. Satish- Nitish shubhankar

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FOUNTAIN

[…] Here’s another interesting post I read today by American Poems Members […]-Bones

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…… MUST UNBELIEVE

hi Satish Verma
I enjoyed your poem it is really great
we have chosen it as example of modern poetry we the members of the ENGLISH SOCIETY in faculty of ARTS KHARTOUM UNIVERSITY SUDAN-yayo 


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Counting

Can you please explain the title?

I love this. The begining line is just amazing
and I like that some of this makes no sense
but at the same time, perfect sense.

It feels like some parts do not really fit in with the poem
but it seems like the whole poem is like that
and I like it.

"It was getting dark in Himalayas"
-- did you mean to write "*the* Himalayas", or was it purposfully left out?

Upon reading this a thirdfourthfifth time, I realise it does all fit together perfectly well and there is a brilliant story behind this, not just beautiful words.

This is brilliant and [.amazing.]- so poetic.

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Millennium Celebrating

The planks lick the salt of earth.
Lipless mouths cannot speak.
Departure of sun was blameless,
unanswerable to human wails.- knightcall

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What Conclusion Was Left?

I rather like this; and I wish I had something more to say other than that, but I'm afraid I'm at a loss of words; but I just had to say something! This really is nice, and I love the emotion put into it. I do hope you have a lovely night.- Behindyouboo

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Puzzles

I'm horrible at giving criticism, but I love this.- breathinghosts 


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Burning Across the Sky

 need to look up some words but that still wouldnt help me to get the 'read-between-the-lines message in this!. Pretty amazing. Im trying to picture it all and wonder what you were picturing/feeling, but im not sure, but I REally like it a lot!!!!!!- flybynyte

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HOMECOMING

Satish a brilliant write of war with intellectual images using metaphors to describe the coming home and the funeral feast. As always you work amazes me. :)- Marcia Schechinger


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A FAMILY DUST

Satish such talent in this verse, as you describe the war bitten land. Though poor, it was still home to some, and now destroyed it builds again from the womb of young mothers. Thank you for sharing. :)- Marcia Schechinger


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TRINITY

Nice write, enjoyed- Nice write


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AGEISM

Very well accomplished, Satish........we should respect our elders more- Paul Judges

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MY FAULT

'How far was the moment of dust' really great line- JOSEPH POEWHIT

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IN REVERSE

'Just unbound, the death rate' soo wel writen with proper flow............- Anita Trivedi

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IN OUR BREASTS

very wel writen...............- Anita Trivedi

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PULSATING VOID

beautiful art - Edward Orozco

nice write,, a pleasure to read this morning- Poet * Destroyer

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FUTURE SIGNS

I like the way you assembled this poem, the words used leaped off the paper... EXCELLENT work my friend....:- Jared Pickett

Interesting thoughts that you have penned in this one...Keep the creative pen flowing..- Sara Kendrick

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INTROSPECTIVE

This is a great way to start my morning reading poetry. I am glad your poetry was among the poetry I have the pleasure to read today. Wishing you a weekend full of love and inspiration Satish. Love- Carol Brown

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FROM DUSK TO DUSK

Satish~ Congratulations on your featured poem!- Laura Mckenzie

Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Satish. May you have many more. Love, - Carol Brown

Satish - Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week, God Bless,- Michael Jordan

Many congrats on your featured piece this week. Rgds- Janette Fisher

Congrats on your featured poem this week on the Soup... a great one to share with us all.. with luv from the "Sweetheart"- Linda-Marie Bariana

Interesting use of imagery to convey your thoughts. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Keep on writing! - Karen O'Leary

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CARBON CHOKING

Thank you for sharing you poetry with us Satish. I enjoyed reading it this afternoon. Hope you have a wonderful weekend running over with inspiration. Love, - Carol Brown

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WRINKLING

I see the weekend brought a lot of inspiration to all PoetrySoup Poets. I enjoyed reading your poetry today Satish. Love,- Carol Brown

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INTROSPECTIVE

This is a great way to start my morning reading poetry. I am glad your poetry was among the poetry I have the pleasure to read today. Wishing you a weekend full of love and inspiration Satish. Love, Carol  Brown


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FAILED IMMORTALITY

The combined effect of an awesome set of words with imagery which goes beyond the obvious gives a stunning piece of work - - thank you for the pleasure of this read.- Fay Slimm

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ENORMOUS GUILT

I enjoyed your expressions on enormous guilt. - Dr. Ram Mehta

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AGEISM

Very well accomplished, Satish........we should respect our elders more-Paul Judges

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FAILED IMMORTALITY

The combined effect of an awesome set of words with imagery which goes beyond the obvious gives a stunning piece of work - - thank you for the pleasure of this read.- Fay Slimm

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LOCKED

Linda-Marie Bariana

Date: 5/30/2010 8:47:00 AM

Hi Satish .. I so enjoyed reading your creative wite today on a special holiday weekend ..with luv from the "Sweetheart"

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FROM DUSK TO DUSK

1. 
   
   Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Satish. May you have many more. Love, - Carol Brown
   
   Satish - Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week, God Bless, - Michael Jordan

Many congrats on your featured piece this week. Rgds - Janette Fisher

Congrats on your featured poem this week on the Soup... a great one to share with us all.. with luv from the "Sweetheart"-Linda-Marie Bariana

Interesting use of imagery to convey your thoughts. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Keep on writing! - Karen O'Leary

Satish~ Congratulations on your featured poem! Laura :0)-Laura Mckenzie 

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BEAST AND LOVERS

1. 

   Dr.Ram Mehta
   Date: 5/28/2010 8:54:00 PM

   

   Nice expressions well penned

1. 

   Carol Brown
   Date: 5/28/2010 11:52:00 AM

   

   Enjoyed reading your poetry and I thank you for sharing it with us Satish. Have a wonderful weekend filled with good health love and loads of inspiration. Love, Carol

   
   

   
   

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NAÏVE INNOCENCE

Satish Great read, so much to be learned here. I will read several times .Thank you for sharing- Pattra Shuwaswat, Netherlands


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I like the images although, a little explanation by way of introduction would have been great.- Shoma Mittra

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