LAKE SONG

A paraxysm of kaleidoscopic & prismesque grandiloquence. And that is truly bonafide poetic largesse . However,that said.....i have been interpreting Literary work for a loooooooooooong time ,sir, and because so, and with all due respect to your most abstruse writing style, i must say that aside from what appears to be an over-reach of Verbiage-4-Effect vernacular...that no two lines in any of the works i have read of yours thus far form any logical nexus,and because so, your poems are coming across as (YES) fancy, spiced, heavily garnished, mysteriously convoluted & quite colourful to boot. However, when it comes to the absolute most important element of any form of Creative Writing, which is SUBSTANCE...your work comes across as non-sequitur...Mind you, this is (IMO)and certainly should not be taken as personal, or of anything else than Literary overview....Be Well,sir.-Frank James Ryan, JR., New York



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* RETURN JOURNEY

nostalgic, wistful, beautiful!- Smita Tewari

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WHAT YOU SAID

I like the last two stanzas..- Sara Kendrick

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REASONING

nice pictorial pour from your pen...thanks-Raju Baruah

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KILLING ZONE

Great use of language here - I enjoyed it very much. - Philip Kirkland, Mexico

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WANDERER

Your lexicon continues to befuddle me, as i am placing earnest effort into de-crypting these cultural termonologies that are obviously blighting many of us here from understanding the crux of your messages,Satish. Sometimes simplex is best when abstruse convolutes....I am guilty myself, so i know what can happen when the attention to sophisticated termonology suddenly becomes grandiloquence...Good Luck & have a great weekend,my friend !- Frank James Ryan Jr

I have no idea of the deeper meaning of these Hindi thoughts, but I feel the depth of feelings here in beliefs that hold humanity dear... Mike

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Dear Sir, great Stanza, I really admire way you capture restlessness of human soul in your verse. Warm regards, - Nandkishore, Mumbai

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BLEEDING DAY

WOW..... I love your play on words.. Not only this poem, but your style.....:- JP[Jared Pickett]

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PRIDE OF VALLEY

Very strong images of life, death and destruction. Are you screaming here for peace in the valley of pride? Moving.-Elizabeth Olesen, Denmark

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RESSURECTION

sir this poem is just mind blowingly good.............has a deep spiritual connectivity............great job sir................- Himabindu Vuddaraju, INDIA

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BREAKING FROM PAST

Well done enjoyed the read..- poet destroyer

This is very good. So sad. I hope you only embraced the mood for the poem. But, I enjoyed it. - Charles Henderson
 
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SLAIN ROSES

i know this should be a place to write an intelligent comment...and i would do just that, but your poems always leave me speechless...there are so many things at sight yet hidden in this!- Liliana Negoi, Romania

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A LIFELONG JOURNEY

deep write, LIKED THE BAD IMAGE IN SOME LINES, i MEAN THAT IN A GOOD WAY. - IRMA HOLE

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THE END

You're a bottomless pit of poetry my friend. Well done. Take care. - Peter Schlosser

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BLAST

Very sad, your words brings vivid imagery. Always Be Well, Carin' Spirit- Carin' Spirit

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THE INDOMITABLE

Lovely images. Liked this a lot. -Peter Schlosser

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Counting

Can you please explain the title?

I love this. The begining line is just amazing
and I like that some of this makes no sense
but at the same time, perfect sense.
It feels like some parts do not really fit in with the poem
but it seems like the whole poem is like that
and I like it.
"It was getting dark in Himalayas"
-- did you mean to write "*the* Himalayas", or was it purposfully left out?
Upon reading this a thirdfourthfifth time, I realise it does all fit together perfectly well and there is a brilliant story behind this, not just beautiful words.
This is brilliant and [.amazing.] - so poetic.
 
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PURSUIT

There is great power in the way you describe this event, Satish. My heart goes out to all the families of the riot victims. Blessings to you, Carolyn Devonshire

A good write. - Dr.Ram Mehta

Sad one,,Well written have a nice one . - poet destroyer

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HEMLET BY CHOICE

An interesting and intriguing write Mr Verma..."False peers were scoring with debts of darkness.- Sandra Martyres

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FLAMES OF SONG

Satish, all babies deserve to be loved, regardless of how they are conceived. I hope this is not a true account, but if it is, you have risen above the sadness in style. Love, -Carolyn Devonshire

Intresting, nice write. -poet destroyer

It was a pleasure to read your poetry this morning Satish. Thank you for sharing your writing. Love, - Carol Brown

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A true deception

Dear Sir
Extremely good piece of work, I have read your work on author's den also. Your work is truly great but some times it's difficult to comprehend and complete the chain of thought for reader. For laymen to understand from the poetry’s point of view if you can just simplify by adding more connection to stanza it would be great. Kindly keep up your good work. Warm regards,- Nandkishore, Mumbai

Satish, your statement that 'I think I don’t trust myself' is very significant in self analysis that you often do in your compositions. The choice of words and the development of the thoughts are very good. It is a treat to read your poems. Best regards,- Kumarendra Mallick, Hyderabad

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IN THE GARDEN OF GETHSEMANE

Powerful imagery. I love it!- Elisabeth Barstowe


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RAAS!

Beautiful poetry!!- Peter Schlosser

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EMPATHY

Outstanding poetry!!-Peter Schlosser

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LOAVES

oh, the mind of Satish! a treasure here on the soup! good day to ya! jimbo-James Marshall Goff

Wonderfully written with great imagery.  - Christopher Aechtner

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DEATH’S REVERSAL

A PONDERING WRITE YOU GOT HERE, NICE ONE! - poet destroyer

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A DAY OF COUNTING

I am so pleased to have been able to read your poetry this morning Satish. Have a wonderful day. Love, Carol Brown

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TAKES OVER

Goofy has something to say. Goofy I can't remember what your poem is about lol I love this-Sonic Idiot, Tampa

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THE TANGO

Interesting thoughts that you have penned in this one..Sara Kendrick

I enjoyed the poem, Nice write-Dr.Ram Mehta

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SUICIDE NOTE

You don't want to see that day coming yet. I love the word usage in this one.-Sandie Angel

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Mask unmasked

Makes me so very glad NOT to be a movie star. --Charlie

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EMPTY DAY

very heart breaking poem. good writing!-Doris Culverhouse

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POINSETTIA

Wow such imagery!!! vey unique!!! - Lizzie

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DOMAIN INVEIGHED

What a fine images you create explicit meanings. A fine write -Dr.Ram Mehta

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MEDITATION

Satish with your wonderful images one sees the morning skies, and as you, hope for peace to come soon. -Marcia Schechinger, USA

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LAKESCAPE

Good to see you here. A poem well penned-Dr. Ram Mehta

I have been reading your work , and find your minds-eye to be afire with grandeur imagination. To label your literary style Abstract would be rendering it gross injustice. Poetic Surrealism (IMO) is the apropos termonology , i think....Abstruse, and slightly convoluted, yet much of it straight forward for interpretation....The elements of complexity that you seem to tease the Reader with are questionable, but only because in general, "When the Reader cannot decipher,the Reader will move on...quickly".In short, when an Author opts to employ verbiage that is sumo-abstruse, they tend to lose a degree of Readership for the simple fact that the work is far over these Reader's heads. Make no mistake....I am a staunch advocate of underlying messages, cryptics, subtle tease, and outright sending Reader's out for a hunt & forcing them to use their minds & wits to get into mine in analyzing the exacts of what i have purposely masqued....I guess what i am saying is...when it all comes down to it....If the Reader cannot pull some ripe fruit off that tall Poet-tree you have planted for them...then your work is for nought...that is unless you stand indifferent to the many who may have found your work intriguing & of general good quality... but (again) due to its very complex nature, that they walk away not really understanding what they just read, and because so, do not revisit your work.... My comment is just an obsevation from my own experience & yes, my own opinion.It is meant to be taken as well-intended & constructive critique for your consideration, is all. After all, Poetfreak is not The New York School For The Fine Arts, and in order to improve our own work, we must be able to establish a large & solid Readership base to support our everyday efforts here, or anywhere we post our work , yes ? Good Luck!\\\FjR///-Frank James Ryan Jr, New York

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BLACK HOLE

but nobody knows what is actually beyond a black hole :) they say that it only swallows matter of any kind, and that even light cannot escape it...but i believe the force that would be required to attract even the light must have something good hidden inside...like a portal towards a different dimension...maybe to heaven-Liliana Negoi


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ARMISTICE

ENJOYED THANK YOU -IRMA HOLE

A well penned poem. I enjoyed it -Dr.Ram Mehta

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SICK TIMES

Satish as always I am amazed of your words and feelings expressed. The last lines "...life moves in a tunnel, absent and present!" leaving the readers with the darkness of the everlasting pain of loss.-Marcia Schechinger, USA

A little of what this poem needs is beauty. But its moving and elegant and should be published in a magazine-Mad and conFused, thailand

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WINDS

Satish your poem definitely provokes, at least for me .Nice visuals-Pattra Shuwaswat, Netherlands

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DIRTY TIME

Interesting thoughts that you have penned...Keep the creative pen flowing.. I especially like the first three lines to me it says an injured spirit smoldering on the inside and someone says something to give rise to this injured spirit and watch out explosion..- Sara Kendrick

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WOUNDED SWASTIKA

sir your poetry is truely fabulous..n being an indian too i can really understand gr8 depth in ur wounded swastika.........its extremely touching...n ur botanical jargons(aurocaria) necrophilic ........scientific terms depict ur a very gud teacher too........thats gr8 n beyond all i can smell the fact ur a very true human being.hats off to ur sir..........such deep rooted succulent(im into ur terminology now!!!!!!!!!!!!) poets are a great source of inspiration for budding poets like us...sir cud u plz check out my poems as well.im dying to hear comments frm established poets like you.......-Himabindu Vuddaraju, INDIA

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THE SILENT PATH

sir this poem s left me dumbstruck...............u reach parsecs in petty few words..................i no im not the 1 who wud have the rite to judge u but sir i really love ur poetry........u epitomise all my views a poet shud have..........great job sir.......-Himabindu Vuddaraju, INDIA

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Baby face

One can find God's face in a newly born child's face.- Rajaram Ramachandran, Juhu Mumbai


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VIRULENCE

Nicely penned poem -Dr.Ram Mehta

different write, enjoyed reading -Doris Culverhouse

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VIRULENCE

Nicely penned poem -Dr.Ram Mehta

different write, enjoyed reading-Doris Culverhouse

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DEATH OF A PROTEST

Wow, very powerful poem my friend....:-Jared Pickett

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THE GLASS HOUSE

Enjoyed reading your poetry today Satish. Please continue to write and share with us as your poetry is always a pleasure to read. Love, - Carol Brown

grt poem -Nivitha Ann Paul

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UNLOOSING

Enjoyed ! Thank you.-IRMA HOLE

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AGE OF THE STRAW

WHAT A READ. NICE ONE -poet destroyer

Beautiful. -Amy Green

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WILL YOU MARRY ME?

Wow! A poem of varied metaphors. I envy you for your deep thoughts.-Jacinta Ramayah, MALAYSIA

satish really impressed after reading your wonderful piece of art. its really beautyful.thanks for a nice reading.-Mukeshkumar Raval, INDIA

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VERBATIM

May our Lord bless you and yours on this Easter Day Satish. Love Carol and Family -Carol Brown

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COLOR CHANGE

Nice! thanks for the good words.-poet destroyer

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FROM DUSK TO DUSK

Satish this was a stirring, emotional piece. Great intensity of expression was conveyed. An excellent poem.- Nancy Crossland, USA

Satish your intense poetry is profound, keeping the reader in suspense as you bring real life issues to view. You are an amazing talent. :)-Marcia Schechinger, USA

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AN ANODE WILL DISCHARGE

I found myself engrossed in your words, great write. - welshpoet

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City of Conscience

I enjoyed reading this lovely piece of art, well done Satish. Btw, Can I feature you and some of your poems, possibly 3 pieces in my website if you don't mind?

I am a poet too and i am currently looking for a next poet to be featured in The Sound of Poetry Review. Pls, have a look and this is the link:
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Self-Deception

A GREAT POETRY FROM A GREAT MAN,

GREAT SHORT- V.SrinivaS
 
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NAKED FREEDOM

A fitting sequel to the very dark occasion, Satish. I especially love the third stanza:

A sleepless summer night
descends on the hill
violins in dark
lie mutilated
To liken living beings to the beauty that is derived from violins is remarkable, and to depict them in death is heartrending, but such is truth, and truth must not be hidden, no matter the horror and injustice.
Thanks for the poem, and I also want to thank you for the last two volumes of poetry; I read and study them with much enjoyment and stimulation of mind. - oxygon

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THE FALL

“The Fall”, as ancient as the chronicles of human experience in a time perspective, and you have taken up the theme in a powerful recounting of personal experiences, and have expressed it in a poem that stretches the limits of words to convey the vision of the poet’s imagination, and powers of depicting reality in the medium of a poem. The imagery and metaphors are startling, and darkly beautiful, and I will not further despoil the poem with extended speculation.- oxygon

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CHRONICITY

An interesting interplay between traditional symbols—Venus as the god of love, and the Venus Flytrap as the enchantment and entrapment of love—O lover beware! I like what is implied in the closing stanza—the beautiful god who goes to sleep, and in keeping with the whims and caprice of the gods, asleep while the sojourner in the convoy of great ideas is in peril. Ha, so true to life, Satish! I enjoyed the poem.- oxygon

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UNENDING

Absolutely beautiful, Satish! The unending return of the ghosts of former years in the advent of the new, I like the manner of the welcoming.
A happy and prosperous New Year, my friend, and I wish you much success in the important enterprise of your labor of devotion in the Foundation.-oxygon

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UNDERSCORING

It underscores the dark reality of a darkest moment—the utter disdain for this baffling miracle we know as life, yet some will casually snuff it out, and dismiss it as if it were a stone that belies the tip of a new pair of shoes! This last stanza, Satish, burns my heart, but not without hope that we can somehow rise above such devastation of the human spirit. Thank you for raising the flag in honor of human goodness, though your songs reflects the darkness that douses the spirit with muddy water of despair.- chapman arthur, jr

I am so small in the magnitude of its call,

I wonder why I should think my voice
to be heard at all . . . - chapman arthur, jr

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VIBRATIONS

To be a question mark in the midst of a dilemma—there are poems, profound, the rattling of the bones of the soul: so many “vibrations”. - chapman arthur, jr

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SWARMING

Air it that by which we breath and live, it is also that by which flies a swarm of killer bees.- chapman arthur, jr

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GEOMETRY

Geometry, the mathematics of flat planes, and of infinite curves, here you have taken it to a new level—the dimension of the wheel chair, and the mind that walks beside it! -chapman arthur, jr

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INWARD ODYSSEY

Lovely but sad, Satish. I just want to you how beautiful your books are. They are so well done. Thank you for sharing them. - Ida Werrett

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AGE OF THE STRAW

This is a very well written poem. I don’t have any critique for it.- Andrew Leamon

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CUDDLING

Despite the intensity of the opening stanzas, filled with images of horror, the presence of a time bomb and an itchy finger on the trigger, and of restlessness, there is a profound sense of relief in the closing stanza—”sunrises gently on the window”! —soft beauty that comes like sudden thunder!- oxygon

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SUN’S INHERITANCE

The beauty of the sun inherits the ugliness of the world below; what a powerful statement! Rather than the order, the harmony of the heavens, the motion of the moon is as if it is “falling on so many stars”! wow! Rifles, and bombs, a bleak panorama—it weighs heavily upon the spirit that desires to be free. This is a remarkable poem, Satish. - oxygon

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A COLLOSAL MISTAKE

In the flawed, human condition, hurtful words, once planted like a seed, will continue to grow in the heart of the wounded, and death will not end the pain; death never heals, that healing is the province of love, and such love can be seen in the birth of an angel, a rose of evening! I love the way the poet has contrasted such joy in birth, against the first denial that builds like a lie upon a lie. To say “Let me, not/bury them, encroaching/upon the meaning—/for a rusted/consequence, a truth/ was left on the road, seems to imply a fervent commitment to keep the words out in the open, like truth abandoned on the roadside, a glaring sight that cannot be hidden. These are my humble impressions, Satish, and if I err, it is to my lack of understanding, rather than my lack of devotion to reading and enjoying the poem. Let me also take a moment to express my appreciation of your—gift— “Footprints in the Dark”. The binding and jacket is as beautiful as the poems are impressive!

Peace! My good friend.- oxygon

A minor correction is in order—The binding and Jacket “are” as beautiful . . . In this instance, I erred indeed. -oxygon

A good attempt of composing a poem to show how some one’s conscience gets rusted .Poets are individuals. I respect their attitude. Subrata Ray .Uluberia .West Bengal .India.

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HOURGLASS

We poets extol the beauty and mystery of the moon in it’s silvery glow, but here the poet sees the paradox of hostility in beauty! It’s a state of mind—the moon not exuding beauty but pain. In the second stanza is hyperbole, and paradox as well, contrasting of the black bird, and the whiteness of the snow man—darkness against light, and finally a snow man on a lake, melting, as if sands in an hourglass! Finally, “Dance the tears/not the tango.”—not a tango of happiness, but a dance of sorrow.-oxygon

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SPLITTING

A beautiful lyric, Satish, with memorable lines—”when the leafless tree was waiting?” I like the composite imagery, the leafless tree, and nakedness, a sense of vulnerability. Regards— oxygon

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PLASMA SCREEN

The devastation of war invokes many dark images, and a war lost is an incalculable, a compounded suffering. —”a wound becomes a tailsman, you start collecting/the awards from severed hands.” What an antithesis to doubtful honor! A telling argument for the futility of bloodletting! This is a powerful penning, Satish, my friend.-oxygon

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POETRY

The great American poet, Wallace Stevens, emphasized the power of the imagination in poetry, and here the imagination is let loose in a series if images and metaphors, that bear out Stevens’ compelling idea. I like the sudden, abrupt interjection of “ice cream cone” and “God bless the Queen.” It makes me think of Stevens’ poem, “The Emperor of Ice Cream”.-oxygon

Poetry is many a splendid thing—a collusion between darkness and light, a fusion that leads to a greater light!-oxygon

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SMALL TALK

What a stark contrast—”small talk”, set against a backdrop of such startling verse: “The flesh will extract its own blood.” ! You have taken the poetic device of hyperbole to another level, Satish, in a dream-scape that is like a riddle in search of it own solution!-Oxygon

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FAIRY TALE

A splendid fairy tale, Satish! I particularly love the opening stanza, the notion of the moon unwed, as if not spoken for by some admiring heart, as it casts its reflection upon the blue lake, and so endued with silence as if making love to it. Thanks for the poem that delights the “upper” ear, and makes waves upon the still waters of the mind!-oxygon

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BODY GAME

I especially like the recurrent imagery and themes of the moon, and the poets communion with it in his poems. You walk in harmony with the moon upon the rough terrain of a poem! What a remarkable line! Your poetry deals so effectively with the themes of belief, desire, and the conflicts that belie the pathway of their attainment, but over and over, your quest persists in the face of violence and darkness, and triumphs, even in the weariness of the unending struggle, “like a tired cow coming/back home in evening.” This image is stunning in the depth of its illustration in the likes of the humble cow! Thanks for a splendid poetic penning – oxygon

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A CLEAN MURDER

Interesting and poignant write, Satish.-Ida Werrett

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Pathofobia

Dear Vermaji, the complexity of feelings and images presented coupled with my ignorance of the context on which it is based, often makes it difficult for me to comprehend your poems. But nevertheless, I see some flashes of greatness playing between those lines. Kudos to you. Recently I visited your Sewa Mandir Foundation website and was impressed by the philanthropic work you are promoting and by your concept of green homeopathy. My respects and best wishes to you and all your associates. -G,Kannan, Anchal

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XULON

Congrats Satish on your featured poem on the Soup this week... an excellent choice to feature and share..luv.. "Sweetheart" -Linda-Marie Bariana
 Congrats for being featured -Dr.Ram Mehta

Sara Kendrick Congratulations on your write being featured..Keep the creative pen flowing.//- Sara Kendrick

XULON -wood -that which is made of wood as a beam from which any one is suspended, a gibbet, a cross/a log or timber with holes in which the feet, hands, neck of prisoners were inserted and fastened with thongs/a fetter, or shackle for the feet/a cudgel, stick, staffa tree a verse about suffering? greed? pain? ugliness?..just guessing? Light & Love -Deborah Guzzi

 Satish~Congratulations on your featured poem! Laura:) -Laura Mckenzie

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THE DIFFERENCE

Great images for what you are putting across. LUv, - Aandrea Dietrich

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GREEN VISION

Last two lines are very impressive and meaningful. I enjoyed it.-Dr. Ram Mehta

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I WILL GLOW MORE

beautiful - great unique imagery and ur last verse is magnificent!!! Lizzie:)-Lizzie

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FATE OF THE KEY

Deep thoughtful poem-T A Ramesh

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AGAIN FALLING IN LOVE

very nice and meaningful poem. really enjoyed reading it today. pl see some of my poems too. take care-seema chowdhury

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