I agree. In was an honest read. I liked it, too.- steelrelease
Aside from your sudden shift from narrator to dialogueor in the second stanza, I enjoyed the read, albeit your usual fluxive structural movement was a bit anemic...In fact, the work actually smacked more of prose than contemporary free-verse. Perhaps the piece might be better served as one paragraph with right-margin-alignment...Either way, as I said above, I liked it.- Frank James Ryan Jr./FjR
Aside from your sudden shift from narrator to dialogueor in the second stanza, I enjoyed the read, albeit your usual fluxive structural movement was a bit anemic...In fact, the work actually smacked more of prose than contemporary free-verse. Perhaps the piece might be better served as one paragraph with right-margin-alignment...Either way, as I said above, I liked it.- Frank James Ryan Jr./FjR
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