Tuesday, November 22, 2016
Monday, November 21, 2016
‘crossing The Bar' Once Again...
I think of the enviornment and the climate - tears in valleys, hmmmm . . . any ressurection now would probably be welcome -allets
The Tear Of Things
must have been some trial if the verdict had to be judged - good one Satish - allets
Non - ‘i’
are struck by sun greetings, but winter is coming and clouds obscure the horizon. I am struck perpetually by greetings to the moon and occasionally, only occasionally, to the sun. - enjoyed, -llets
Sunday, November 20, 2016
Summer’s Fault
Thursday, November 17, 2016
Gifting
I love the neat layout. Punchy cryptic stanzas that tantalise and tease with possible discoveries.
Take care, -Mr Darcy
Take care, -Mr Darcy
Sunday, November 13, 2016
Earth's Intelligence
Wow this is a brilliant write. What really caught me was the beautiful imagery created with:
"The birds are
going to follow the sun carrying
the moon on their wings. "
As certain birds navigate the earth via the magnetic field (governed by gravity) which also interacts most closely with the moon (the closest object to us in space) - I found this specific line genius.
There is only one tiny suggestion I have for improvement:
"Do not open this dirt file of
the suspended time. It reverberates"
the second line of this could be
"suspended time; it reverberates"
taking out the filler word will decrease the syllable count of this line and help it read better, and a full stop in that particular position is not quite necessary, a semicolon keeps the ideas joined and flowing a bit more than it does.
But that's such a minor detail, which isn't going to take away from me nominating this for the weekly contest.-ether
Judging Comment:
The beauty in this piece is that the topic is something both elegant and completely unrelated to all the drama and unrest going on in the world lately. The descriptions are both fun and wheel spinning, and yet off the wall without being totally off the rail - which was an interesting way to complete such a piece - but it worked 100% of the way through. Which is something I truly admire about this author this week, they tried something both unrealistic and beautiful yet al the while the author stuck it out and tried to make that work. Which this week was a success.-BlueJay
"The birds are
going to follow the sun carrying
the moon on their wings. "
As certain birds navigate the earth via the magnetic field (governed by gravity) which also interacts most closely with the moon (the closest object to us in space) - I found this specific line genius.
There is only one tiny suggestion I have for improvement:
"Do not open this dirt file of
the suspended time. It reverberates"
the second line of this could be
"suspended time; it reverberates"
taking out the filler word will decrease the syllable count of this line and help it read better, and a full stop in that particular position is not quite necessary, a semicolon keeps the ideas joined and flowing a bit more than it does.
But that's such a minor detail, which isn't going to take away from me nominating this for the weekly contest.-ether
Judging Comment:
The beauty in this piece is that the topic is something both elegant and completely unrelated to all the drama and unrest going on in the world lately. The descriptions are both fun and wheel spinning, and yet off the wall without being totally off the rail - which was an interesting way to complete such a piece - but it worked 100% of the way through. Which is something I truly admire about this author this week, they tried something both unrealistic and beautiful yet al the while the author stuck it out and tried to make that work. Which this week was a success.-BlueJay
Bewildering
Pardon My Darkness
Nice narration of Violincell that is always present in Some people that are ruled by Yama!
Just Depicted my Life as is now..! relaxes me so much and immensely! .. and that Poem would fall n the ground-Siddartha Montik
A poem falls on the ground
to breath again.
A wonderful inspirational write. Thanks for sharing.10 points.-Ratnakar Mandlik
Just Depicted my Life as is now..! relaxes me so much and immensely! .. and that Poem would fall n the ground-Siddartha Montik
to breath again.
A wonderful inspirational write. Thanks for sharing.10 points.-Ratnakar Mandlik
Trying To Sleep
Floats on the dampened page of life. Profound and thought provoking write. Thanks for sharing.10 points.-Ratnakar Mandlik
Wednesday, November 9, 2016
On The Breast Of Flames
Yes... my sky, my roof and my 'he'...what about that... we had been fighting for the teachers without paying even a little heed to their teachings.
I am sorry I have been responding to your poems far too frequently. Readers should not think I am trying to form a group. I respond when I feel like, that's all. Readers...please grow up, as you read on!!! Surya please do not delete this...let everyone know that I am responding to accusations and allegations against the quality of YS.-Supratik Sen, Kolkata
I am sorry I have been responding to your poems far too frequently. Readers should not think I am trying to form a group. I respond when I feel like, that's all. Readers...please grow up, as you read on!!! Surya please do not delete this...let everyone know that I am responding to accusations and allegations against the quality of YS.-Supratik Sen, Kolkata
Saturday, November 5, 2016
Irreverent
Very nice poem, great use of metaphor, the words also contain a strong visual component which I think makes them really tangible. "yellow paper" for example, can be understood in a primal way. I love stream-of-consciousness style poetry and feel that this is of that style. Nice work.-Oneyedtoad
Through your poem
Hello Sir,
My name is Naaz Fatima Khan and Iam writing you from Lucknow.
The common link here is Highonpoem. Today, in fact minutes before I read your poem titled "Love in Original". After reading that, I went to the descriptive profile of yours. Initially, as a person who has attached her identity along with words and expressions, your poem travelled and reached to that admiration. Secondly, when your profile says about the social causes and your active involvement, that brought the another touch of respect.
So, without wasting my time, Iam here to give you and Ma'am many best wishes for all the humanity you possess. Its a blessing of its own kind if time allows you to cross such people who sends beautiful thoughts to the world. Iam feeling lucky in that same way.
It would be my fortune if I could be any sort of help in this.
Basically, I have been indulged in writing. But whatever I do, the core intention is to inspire people around.
The common link here is Highonpoem. Today, in fact minutes before I read your poem titled "Love in Original". After reading that, I went to the descriptive profile of yours. Initially, as a person who has attached her identity along with words and expressions, your poem travelled and reached to that admiration. Secondly, when your profile says about the social causes and your active involvement, that brought the another touch of respect.
So, without wasting my time, Iam here to give you and Ma'am many best wishes for all the humanity you possess. Its a blessing of its own kind if time allows you to cross such people who sends beautiful thoughts to the world. Iam feeling lucky in that same way.
It would be my fortune if I could be any sort of help in this.
Basically, I have been indulged in writing. But whatever I do, the core intention is to inspire people around.
I would love to hear from you.
Regards,- Naaz Fatima Khan,Lucknow
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