TENDER RAGE

Once again, Satish, though each stanza owns its own projective merit....the piece as a "whole" fails to connect the dots of any defining storyline. The work lacks a nexus that enables your audience to establish a course that they can follow, relate to & be captured by. This is NOT to say that the work holds no substanceful value....for based on imagescape alone, one must recognise & acknowledge your extreme largess of creating grandeur image/pictorial....If i could make a suggestion, that you number your stanzas when you opt to pen in the style exhibited above. In doing so, you have told your Readership up-front that each line-group or stanza are seperate trains of thought, and ergo....should be read as if seperate works.....-Frank James Ryan,Jr./FjR

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