Wow, you have some very profound poetry.
Of course this is just my analogy of your poem, I hope you will enlighten me as to its true meaning.
Like a quivering leaf climbing
unreachable thighs of a cloud
in naked shelter of sun.
^The first stanza starts off with the feeling of vulnerability. Perhaps it is meant to bring a feeling of being somewhere that you are forced to be. I don't know why but my first thoughts of this stanza had me visualizing someone climbing the steps to the gallows, with only the scorching sun as the shelter. The sun being the only thing between he and his maker. The title is also relevant in the first stanza, with gallows you are choked and hanged.
I lament the fall
of a colossus
who would not live in a glass house.
^^^ This stanza took me to the innocence of an individual as they are being perceived a trouble maker of some sort. Perhaps wronfully accused of a deed. Grieving the fact that a man of pride would certainly not do such a thing as accused. The insertion of "colossus who would not live in a glass house" makes me think of the old adage "Don't throw rocks if you live in a glass house". Which could lead me to believe that the accuser is just as vulnerable to such accusations and should watch their own step.
Ash smeared on face
a name walks on the book
of barefoot poems.
^^^ This part of the poem led me into a couple of directions, the first being the ash, does it represent the literal burning of someone or is it a representation of Lent, or perhaps neither. I loved the line" a name walks on the book of barefoot poems." this line made me think of that are time (lives) are set to a schedule and it should not be in mans hand the cause for demise. It also reminded me of a more Christian outlook that our names are recorded in a book and when the roll is called will we be among the entrants to Heaven.
Today I am going to morph
into a death sentence
for an uncommitted crime.
^^ This brings me back to the being sentenced to death though being innocent.
Interesting word choice being that you are going to "morph" into a death sentence. It seems so out of place but yet it seems very fitting as the body is present but the soul will die a peaceful death because it is truly innocent.
Who had lost himself
in unslept awakening
of a disaster?
^^^Interesting close for a poem to end with a question. Have we not all felt this way at one time or another, being falsely accused of something. To be innocent and accused is definitely a disaster, and that alone brings the title into play.
I hope my analogy of your poem does not offend and was not too far off your target of intent. I have greatly enjoyed reading it and look forward to reading more of your work. - Dixiedaisy
http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/
Of course this is just my analogy of your poem, I hope you will enlighten me as to its true meaning.
Like a quivering leaf climbing
unreachable thighs of a cloud
in naked shelter of sun.
^The first stanza starts off with the feeling of vulnerability. Perhaps it is meant to bring a feeling of being somewhere that you are forced to be. I don't know why but my first thoughts of this stanza had me visualizing someone climbing the steps to the gallows, with only the scorching sun as the shelter. The sun being the only thing between he and his maker. The title is also relevant in the first stanza, with gallows you are choked and hanged.
I lament the fall
of a colossus
who would not live in a glass house.
^^^ This stanza took me to the innocence of an individual as they are being perceived a trouble maker of some sort. Perhaps wronfully accused of a deed. Grieving the fact that a man of pride would certainly not do such a thing as accused. The insertion of "colossus who would not live in a glass house" makes me think of the old adage "Don't throw rocks if you live in a glass house". Which could lead me to believe that the accuser is just as vulnerable to such accusations and should watch their own step.
Ash smeared on face
a name walks on the book
of barefoot poems.
^^^ This part of the poem led me into a couple of directions, the first being the ash, does it represent the literal burning of someone or is it a representation of Lent, or perhaps neither. I loved the line" a name walks on the book of barefoot poems." this line made me think of that are time (lives) are set to a schedule and it should not be in mans hand the cause for demise. It also reminded me of a more Christian outlook that our names are recorded in a book and when the roll is called will we be among the entrants to Heaven.
Today I am going to morph
into a death sentence
for an uncommitted crime.
^^ This brings me back to the being sentenced to death though being innocent.
Interesting word choice being that you are going to "morph" into a death sentence. It seems so out of place but yet it seems very fitting as the body is present but the soul will die a peaceful death because it is truly innocent.
Who had lost himself
in unslept awakening
of a disaster?
^^^Interesting close for a poem to end with a question. Have we not all felt this way at one time or another, being falsely accused of something. To be innocent and accused is definitely a disaster, and that alone brings the title into play.
I hope my analogy of your poem does not offend and was not too far off your target of intent. I have greatly enjoyed reading it and look forward to reading more of your work. - Dixiedaisy
http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/
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