Dark, haunting, frustrated. The themes and character of this poem are subtlety built and only portrayed by innuendo ("An imbecile / sky pours the eyes, nose and ears. / ... I am persona non grata / in my own home. The moon does not cry.") You are there corporally yet you had to open a lid to emerge as a metamorphized insect-like being; your vampiric nature does not allow you to die yet you are "stupid, courting [your] failures."
The poem has multiple layers, one being the apparent depiction of the monster, but another being that of an estranged father-husband, no longer involved in the lives or loves of his family, avoided and treated as dead to those who once made up his world. He cannot leave, but there is nothing there for him to stay.-Larry Chamberlin the Godfather
This poem is filled with deep metaphors and sentiments and I had to re and re-read it to get to its depth. This can go in any direction but it all leads to the fact that no matter what is happening around this thing/person/earth, it stays unattached and un-involved not wanting to know anything.-Meena Krish
Congratulations.
I have stated my opinion regarding your poetry before, it's fascinating how you use nature as a main character to present your different thoughts. You play with the words and employ the metaphor very well. So much deserving and glad to see this on the front page. -GB
Judging Comment:
An absolutely wonderful abstract piece that made me think - this seems to be a beautiful ode to mother earth, in the sense that the earth will not be dead once all of mankind is dead, something that people often forget or refuse to understand. "I am persona non grata /in my own home." Those two verses struck me hard, since it speaks volumes about what we do to earth, we go about destroying the earth for our own needs, causing many species to go extinct. We're even inclined to remove weeds, or destroy anything that doesn't seem "pretty" in our own yards. It's a beautiful piece that touches on this, well done. - Senyru
http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/
The poem has multiple layers, one being the apparent depiction of the monster, but another being that of an estranged father-husband, no longer involved in the lives or loves of his family, avoided and treated as dead to those who once made up his world. He cannot leave, but there is nothing there for him to stay.-Larry Chamberlin the Godfather
This poem is filled with deep metaphors and sentiments and I had to re and re-read it to get to its depth. This can go in any direction but it all leads to the fact that no matter what is happening around this thing/person/earth, it stays unattached and un-involved not wanting to know anything.-Meena Krish
Congratulations.
I have stated my opinion regarding your poetry before, it's fascinating how you use nature as a main character to present your different thoughts. You play with the words and employ the metaphor very well. So much deserving and glad to see this on the front page. -GB
Judging Comment:
An absolutely wonderful abstract piece that made me think - this seems to be a beautiful ode to mother earth, in the sense that the earth will not be dead once all of mankind is dead, something that people often forget or refuse to understand. "I am persona non grata /in my own home." Those two verses struck me hard, since it speaks volumes about what we do to earth, we go about destroying the earth for our own needs, causing many species to go extinct. We're even inclined to remove weeds, or destroy anything that doesn't seem "pretty" in our own yards. It's a beautiful piece that touches on this, well done. - Senyru
http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/
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