wow , this was deep , keep writing-Aaron
This is really beautiful and unique in its own way. I especially like how you finish with the piece. "The gap between the lips was widening...." This is such a perfect way to really emphasize the message of your poem. You have your own unique voice, and I can really hear it in this piece. You have your own views on your surroundings and your observations that you are really good at showing. You don't have to be completely conspicuous as to what you are trying to portray either, which I have found is a huge talent to be able to speak to your readers without completely shoving your voice and ideas down their throat. I applaud you for your originality. You really stood out from tons of other writers I've read. Thank you. -Eve
All the worsened circumstances of political issues must effecting the daily life of ordinary people...we..the posh meal of their monster like hunger!
Thanks for sharing this Satish!-Tahsin.Z
This is really beautiful and unique in its own way. I especially like how you finish with the piece. "The gap between the lips was widening...." This is such a perfect way to really emphasize the message of your poem. You have your own unique voice, and I can really hear it in this piece. You have your own views on your surroundings and your observations that you are really good at showing. You don't have to be completely conspicuous as to what you are trying to portray either, which I have found is a huge talent to be able to speak to your readers without completely shoving your voice and ideas down their throat. I applaud you for your originality. You really stood out from tons of other writers I've read. Thank you. -Eve
All the worsened circumstances of political issues must effecting the daily life of ordinary people...we..the posh meal of their monster like hunger!
Thanks for sharing this Satish!-Tahsin.Z
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