Coding An Ocean

It kinda gets lost in itself in that third stanza. Writing is entirely dependent on the audience after all. If this has a significant personal reference to you then that is all that really matters, but as a reader I got lost there. Overall I get a message of a person who is more connected to their lover than the lover is to them. Perhaps a one night stand, somebody feeling taken advantage of after a first date.-Author Gus


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