'It spills the light
for a troubled window
cracked by hail.'
I thought the image was just beautiful. My only suggestion would be to change 'for a troubled window' to 'from a troubled window' for better clarity.-Skyfire
Wednesday, May 13, 2020
Let's Decide
I will not claim to understand all your imagery, but I liked the way this flowed. This was my favorite verse:
'It spills the light
for a troubled window
cracked by hail.'
I thought the image was just beautiful. My only suggestion would be to change 'for a troubled window' to 'from a troubled window' for better clarity.-Skyfire
'It spills the light
for a troubled window
cracked by hail.'
I thought the image was just beautiful. My only suggestion would be to change 'for a troubled window' to 'from a troubled window' for better clarity.-Skyfire
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