SWARMING

Wonderful creative writing today Satish. I will be back soon to read more if the gremlins in PoetrySoup will permit. Love- Carol Brown

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Flames of song

Satish Vermaji,
"I was caught stealing words from your lips";
"Baked brown in heat of wars like a salted pistachio" ...
I liked these images.
However, I could not get at "almond love". How about considering 'built' for 'made' in: "Pyramid was not made in a day."
Is "embers" symbolic of fossil or in criticism of atomic power plants coming up? If later is the case, wouldn't 'embers', perhaps, be more symbolic?
Thanks for the interesting and inflaming songs. with regards, -NS Murty, Bangalore

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Disbelievingly

Moved to workshop as I think the images are too ambiguous. Interesting poem, but I have no clue!-Lavonne Westbrooks

As in your other poem, you need to look twice for an opening line:
You wear mauve when I cry.
I really like some of the images you come up with, but in the ther disparity needs to be connected in some way.
Try again.
And for God's sake, if any of these are darlings, kill them.- maggie flanagan-wilkie

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RETURN ON D-DAY

June 6,1944...Normandy...My Father was a U.S.N. Radioman on D-Day, and was also stationed in the South Pacific(Guam) right before the take-out of Hiroshima & Nagasaki. He was a gentle man who wanted to defend our Freedom, and volunteered to take-on aruably the most haeeowing & dangerous assignment,as Radiomen did not have quick access to their rifles, due to their priority to carry all the radio equipment...But he accepted this role, as he felt it would also make him unlikely to be able to fire his rifle at the enemy, even if it be in self-defense.My Dad would rather been killed than to be guilty of killing, i am convinced of that, based on the altruistic life he led in his 86 years on this planet!He died in late, 2008 of the one thing in life he feared....To be a victim of Alzheimers....as in his mind, that would be easy for him to bear , but not for we, his family, who he could not bear to burden.It was like June 6th, 1944 all over again!-Frank James Ryan,Jr./FjR

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IN SLEEP

How do you know if opacity runs, as opacity is opaque to the human eye...Is this a spin on K-PAX? - Frank James Ryan,Jr./FjR

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Naming

loving this...much enjoyed- James Carver

Satish, welcome. I have a little trouble reading "of spotted survivor" but enjoyed the vivid images elsewhere in the poem. "A pain of you hangs on my door" and the "black moon" are the most memorable.-Tom Riordan

Satish,
welcome. there's a change of tone and style in S3 that's not quite matching the the rest of the poem, like it reaches
back to an older language. a good intro.-Tiko Lewis

This gave me much pleasure, Satish. Welcome.- milner place

I was into this until the syntax turned antiquated:
why did not
you stay beside me?- Jay Dougherty

lovely piece...especially the final line, like it- Jerry Pike

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BLOODSCAPE

Satish Vermaji, Your angst for the monolithic religions and the youth sacrificing their lives which is akin to hysterectomy for a dubious cause, thus life reducing to a commodity is understandable. "Selling rage" is poignantly clear and polytheists are no exception here. The selection of words is very good.
Rather than an assertion " Be 'it' today, or tomorrow, the blood brings honor", I would have liked it expressed as a question.
Again, its true that the roots are destroying in Democracies. But then, but then it is roots to blame for they nourish the tops toiling hard to squeeze the essences from earth. May be the soil needs a different kind of structure.
A very thought provoking poem. It could have been dressed a bit better. Congrats and best regards-NS Murty, Bangalore

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BODY GAME

Thank you for sharing your excellent poetry I have enjoyed reading it today Satish. Wishing you a wonderful weekend and hoping you find lots of inspiration along the way. Love-Carol Brown

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I AM BURNING MY BRIDGES

Satish, congrats on your poem being featured this week,have yourself a wonderful weekend,..- ¥ Destroyer ¥ Poet

Congratulations on your featured poem this week Satish. Love-Carol Brown

Congrats Satish on your featured poem this week on PS... nice one luv...-Linda-Marie The Sweetheart of P.S.

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RAGING MOON

Such an indepth write. I did enjoy...Lady Dragonwyck

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GOLDEN END

great imagery in this stunning poem....an introspection...an analysis of life, love, death and everything. great poem-sathyanarayana


Another breathlessly transendental experience within each line -- your talent knows no bounds with fantastic imagery my friend.-Fay Slimm


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PERFECTION

perfect! perfect!.. enjoyed your poem,, have yourself a wonderful and blessed day- ¥ Destroyer ¥ Poet

I have read your poetry today and in my mind it is an interesting and excellent piece Satish. I will return again soon to read more of your writings. Love- Carol Brown

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Climbing

Some things don't come easy.- JOSEPH POEWHIT


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PERFECTION

I have read your poetry today and in my mind it is an interesting and excellent piece Satish. I will return again soon to read more of your writings. Love- Carol Brown

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RIVAL ENTREATIES

''alters the chemistry of hate in negative space''-excellent philosophy for life ,dr Verma,nice vision. -Marieta Maglas

I sense a Thesaurus, well employed, yet pleading out its leatherbound binding to be employed as but only a contributor to a storyline from an intelligent mind SUCH AS YOURS...When thou shalt see one, kind Sir of the kaleidoscopic verse! -Frank James Ryan,Jr./FjR


I sense primal forces at play here; a mystery that might be glimpsed, but never fully understood, except by those few willing to risk (or sacrifice) the ego, to become one with it.-Chaos1214


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TRANSITIONAL EDGE

TRULY...THE STENCH OF AMAGEDDON IS AT THE DOOR. IT IS SURELY MUCH LATER THAN WE THINK...AND THE TIME QUICKLY APPROACHES WHEN IT WILL BE... TOO LATE, FOREVER. WELL DONE AND APPRECIATED. DROP BY MY 'DEN- Joyce Bell

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THE ANODYNE

I hear you knocking on our doors of perception, but it's hard to read between these lines when the only light flickers to read by are the burning... but you could read my mind, now couldn't you?- Roger Wayne Eberle

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ONE RUNAWAY RELIGION

Good write..a lot of wisdom here.- Jim Kistner Jr

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RELIGION

Enjoyed reading your poetry today Satish.-Carol Brown

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WHAT YOU SAID

The waves died in immensity Somewhere a dolphin dips in mind To pick up the music ........excellent-Debs


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A Day of Counting

Satish poet and wordsmith .. a sad and tragic poem filled with irony .. it is a great work that leads to an awakening ... a stirring of the soul. warmest regards - rassool jibraeel snyman, South Africa

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DISCLAIMER

So true it has become... good write. :)- Jim Kistner Jr 

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FOR THE CLOTTING

Enjoying reading the very diverse poetry here today. I am happy to see you have shared a bit of your excellent writing with us today Satish. Heres hoping you have a wonderful day. Love- Carol Brown

A deep thoughtful write here....enjoyed.- kashinath karmakar

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FALLING APART

Wow! Awesome! I'm definitely feeling this! Thanks for sharing!- Debbie Lacy

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BETWEEN FEAR AND COURAGE

Very nicely written! I love it Satish! You really have a way with words! Thanks for sharing! - Debbie Lacy

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A HOME IN MY HOME

Swallows know.- Patrick Granfors

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PATH OF DESTINY

Wow, very intense writing, and the imagery really bring across the title's essence beautifully.- Michelle Mead

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TABLEAU

An exquisite poem! The last stanza was simply stunning. With regards-Shigufta Hena Uzma, Patna

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WOUNDED PRIDE

Today, I declare you " THE KING OF IMAGERY" The man behind Reason and Words! Speaking in a language that conveys with logic and a message of love! Great write! Love and Peace for always!.-Romeo Della Valle




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BLEEDING DAY

Third World Anathema,at its ripest core? I like it....-Frank James Ryan,Jr./FjR


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* VOICELESS

Likes this poem.- Marieta Maglas

parallel voices meeting at their infinity in a black star of the sky...the message is very well underlined..thank you for sharing- Marieta Maglas

A nice write up of her. Interesting.- Debs


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PATH OF DESTINY

Wow, very intense writing, and the imagery really bring across the title's essence beautifully.- Michelle Mead

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GATHER THE SUN

Gather the sun, dear Satish--keep those black shadows away. 
"when the innocent eyes seek the beauty of truth," -- beautiful lines you share, along with your deep, searching thoughts. - Connie Faust

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DARES THE STORM

SINCE GOD ALLOWS THE 'STORMS' IN OUR LIVES...WE INDEED 'DARE'...WE INDEED 'KISS' THE STORM THAT HE HAS PERMITTED US TO ENCOUNTER...FOR OUR GOOD AND FOR HIS GLORY. WELL DONE! THANKS FOR SHARING. LOVE- Joyce Bell

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ALONE IN THE HEAT

'...ALONE IN THE HEAT...' IF THIS IS TRUE TO ONE...THEN ALL THEY CAN SEE IS 'DEATH'. HOWEVER, IF THIS IS NOT TRUE TO ONE...THEN ALL THEY CAN SEE, IN SPITE OF WHATEVER THEY MAY BE 'SEEING'... IS 'LIFE'- Joyce Bell

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SUNRISE

AND BEHOLD...WISDOM DAWNS; THAT ROCK, THOSE BOULDERS...IN OUR PATHWAY WERE NOT PLACED SO AS TO DETER US, NOT MEANT FOR US TO STUMBLE UPON...BUT TO 'STEP UP' ON...AND MEET THE SONRISE. A WONDERFUL META- Joyce Bell

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PASSAGE TO UNKNOWN

Interesting poetry concerning the inner working of our thoughts. I like, very much, you pure poetic form and your searing within it.- Jerry Bolton

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SILENCE OF DOORS

Profound insights, asking many introspective questions. In this delicate thing we call, life and death.- Andy Turner

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BOUQUET

An appealing invitation. May you have the answer you desire. - Connie Faust

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THE HUNT HAD FAILED

ONE ONLY FAILS IF...THEY GIVE UP AND DO NOT TRY AGAIN. WELL DONE AND ENJOYED. THANKS FOR SHARING. LOVE, BLESSINGS & FAITH... 
JOYCE * HIS INSPIRATIONS- Joyce Bell

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CONFESSIONAL TRUTH

IF ONE IS PURSUING 'LIGHT'...ONE MUST EMBRACE THE TRUTH. FOR AS ONE DRAWS CLOSER AND CLOSER TO THE 'LIGHT'...THE 'LIGHT' DEMANDS IT. WELL DONE AND ENJOYED. THANKS FOR SHARING. LOVE, BLESSINGS & FAITH.- Joyce Bell

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THE TRAGIC INTIMACY

TO BE ABLE TO 'SPEAK'...WITH A WORD, POEM, SONG OR PEN...WHEREVER ONE FINDS THEMSELVES TO BE...IS A BLESSING. THANKS FOR SHARING. LOVE, BLESSINGS & FAITH...JOYCE * HIS INSPIRATIONS- Joyce Bell

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STENCH OF DEATH

Ya have quite a few one-line gems throughout this poem. A poem dedicated to searching out answers and then not knowing quite what to do with the answer, you let the reader mull the query. Enjoyed this- Jerry Bolton

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BETWEEN TWO CENTURIES

Fading age wears new wrinkles....beautiful line. Thanks.- George MacLean Akurunwa

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FAIRY TALE

a great images brought to my mind...so wonderful and splendid...really impressed... - jun-jun villanueva

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BREAKING FROM PAST

likes this poem.- Adam Stutz 


Love the imagery this one too! Great imagination shown in all your works. Thanks for sharing! Love and Peace for always!-Romeo Della Valle


I absolutely love this poem!-Adam Stutz


Deeply passionate...So well expressed! I read it more than once... Dorothy A Poet Who Loves To Sing-Dorothy A. Holmes apwlts2


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ANOTHER LOVE

A very impressive and poignant write with great imagery! A thought provoking piece that catches the reader attention! Keep inspiring the World my friend! Love and Peace for always!...Thanks for sharing!-Romeo Della Valle


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TERROR TRAIL

Rohit Mulange
Very wisely chosen words


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FLYING BEARD

What more could I ask for today? It is a beautiful day the sun shining and birds singing. Thank you for sharing your awesome poetry with us Satish. Love-Carol Brown

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FLAMES OF SONG

Full of breathtaking imagery your work ever fascinates Satish. Do you ever write short stories ? They would be as enchanting as any Arabian Nights I am sure.- Fay Slimm

nice work.- narain, jay p.

Count them, count them, count them down... Quatrains, 5, no nexus found....Upon this poem page tonight.....albeit qualified to light.....ones hemisphere of the minds right side.....Your imagescape can't be denied...Still i wish you'd offer storyline !- Frank James Ryan,Jr./FjR


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A LIFELONG JOURNEY

Yet the poet could see the stars...its the winning phase of life perhaps. Nice poem.- Pranab k chakraborty


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A Grave Reminder

very touchable poem - Shanti

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MOODS

a very interesting poem, Satish. It is haunting really. In my own mind I consider it as abstract and contemplative right up to and including "do not cry in the afternoon". thanks for sharing it. I think it unique and original.- Robert A. Dufresne

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A BOMBER UNSPEAKS

excellent.-Josh Williams

Beautiful.I loved this.-Taniya Sikder 

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RED AND WHITE

The poem is mystical in its flow and meaning ...the death comes in many forms and ways both painful and peaceful ...the mantis of maya does all in the end..-Nikunj


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BOLD STEP

Boundaries of denial, bones of dreams,.... creative and thought provoking poem.-seema chowdhury


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just love this piece, warmest regards,- rassool jibraeel snyman, South Africa

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The Death of Silence

Indeed all of us enact the drama. Enjoyable.-U K Atiyodi, Kandangali, Payyan

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