loving this...much enjoyed- James Carver
Satish, welcome. I have a little trouble reading "of spotted survivor" but enjoyed the vivid images elsewhere in the poem. "A pain of you hangs on my door" and the "black moon" are the most memorable.-Tom Riordan
Satish,
welcome. there's a change of tone and style in S3 that's not quite matching the the rest of the poem, like it reaches
back to an older language. a good intro.-Tiko Lewis
This gave me much pleasure, Satish. Welcome.- milner place
I was into this until the syntax turned antiquated:
why did not
you stay beside me?- Jay Dougherty
lovely piece...especially the final line, like it- Jerry Pike
Satish, welcome. I have a little trouble reading "of spotted survivor" but enjoyed the vivid images elsewhere in the poem. "A pain of you hangs on my door" and the "black moon" are the most memorable.-Tom Riordan
Satish,
welcome. there's a change of tone and style in S3 that's not quite matching the the rest of the poem, like it reaches
back to an older language. a good intro.-Tiko Lewis
This gave me much pleasure, Satish. Welcome.- milner place
I was into this until the syntax turned antiquated:
why did not
you stay beside me?- Jay Dougherty
lovely piece...especially the final line, like it- Jerry Pike
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