Time unleashed from (ferrum) iron?
becomes pain
like a palm moon. *
*A clue to unnderstanding the palm moon would be nice.
Another talbleau vivant
has taken up life
in the road.
It was a night of rage. . It needs a connection, this rage.
or
Another tableau vivant
inhabits the road.
It's painted with rage.
This next stanza needs some clarity: fire and flute?
A frozen scene
undulates the history of fire
in the eyes of a flute.
Who was breaking
the clouds
wading in reeds?- maggie flanagan-wilkie
The leaps in thought don't work for me. See Maggie's comment above. It might be that I lack the cultural references, like palm moon. Is that a moon in the palm of the hand, or a moon in the palm trees, or a tattoo of a moon in the palm of a hand?-Rick Stansberger
becomes pain
like a palm moon. *
*A clue to unnderstanding the palm moon would be nice.
Another talbleau vivant
has taken up life
in the road.
It was a night of rage. . It needs a connection, this rage.
or
Another tableau vivant
inhabits the road.
It's painted with rage.
This next stanza needs some clarity: fire and flute?
A frozen scene
undulates the history of fire
in the eyes of a flute.
Who was breaking
the clouds
wading in reeds?- maggie flanagan-wilkie
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